SKIN
When sweet and stiff
I felt young and strong
Living hollow, there was no tomorrowWhen red or not fed
I cared for dearth and death
Noticing as ever, there was no foreverWhen tickled and wrinkled
I wanted no dime but time
Doing worthier than doing betterWhen loose and smooth
I saw gravity’s beat but no defeat
I am no timeless skin, but no worthless life
I joined Writing 201: Poetry.
Today’s assignment: Theme (skin), the simple form (prose poem), and subtle-yet-effective device (internal rhyme).
And you said you were not a poet.
I beg to differ.
A poet.
You, are.
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I’m
Not. Seriously! This one almost made me drop out. This is not my thing.
Thank you, Andy. You’re really generous.
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Well for a drop out you did a fine job 😉
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Now I just need to mimic Bill gates! Lol
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Oh, better Steve Jobs 😉
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He died too soon, so I’m going after Zuckerberg or Gates
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Ha.. He is one of my heroes anyway 🙂
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Steve?
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Yes…
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You are a wonderful poet!!
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Why thank you! It’s quite a compliment for a non-poet!
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Not a poet? This was beautiful 🙂 Fave line “I am no timeless skin, but no worthless life” Beautiful…
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Thank you so much for dropping by and for the lovely comment. Appreciated!
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You may have struggled with it, but you gave it a go anyway and you wrote some great lines.
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Thank you so much for the considerate words. I’m grateful that you read it.
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The jig is up , Lucile. You most definitely are a poet. I am amazed; I could not do this.
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Lois, you’re so kind. I’m no poet, and I’m struggling to do this stuff. Thank you!
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Nice use of internal rhyming, Lucile!
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Sweating to make it rhyme! Not my thing!
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Thank you.
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Who ever told you that you are not a poet? I beg to disagree because your words are great! 🙂
I love the rhymes and the rhythm and the simple choice of words! Great job!
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I love this – like a journey through the aging skin – beautiful xx
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Thank you so much! I aged while trying to do this. 😉 xx
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Haha 🙂 xx
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roses are red
violets are blue
photographer, we’ve said
and freakin’ poet too
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Haha you’re da man, poet!
I spent hours struggling to write this stuff and you just did one in seconds.
You should do mine today. A limerick. Ready?
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Limerick…hmmmm, let’s see
There once was a woman from Amsterdam
Who photographed bridges and pieces of ham
No…I can’t do it
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It was looking good so go ahead…
But pieces of ham? Change this line..lol
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Attempt #2:
There once was a woman from Amsterdam
who took pictures of bridges
and made me same damn!
…no
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hahaha it’s almost there. keep trying. love it.
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Very well written.
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Thank you so much, Peter. You’re kind.
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This is good! The last line is the best line. You’ve captured a sense of ageing beautifully. 🙂
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Nicely done, that is one difficult poem! Awesome photo!
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Thank you! And again it is easier to make the photo! 😉
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