If I Could, I Would Be There

writing-101

I warned you yesterday that I am following the WP Writing101 course to learn more about writing. It is Day Two and I am enjoying it so far. Bear with me as I can only get better, right?

Today’s Prompt: If you could zoom through space in the speed of light, what place would you go to right now?

Today, choose a place to which you’d like to be transported if you could — and tell us the backstory. How does this specific location affect you? Is it somewhere you’ve been, luring you with the power of nostalgia, or a place you’re aching to explore for the first time?

Today’s twist: organize your post around the description of a setting.

Giving your readers a clear sense of the space where your story unfolds will help them plunge deeper into your writing. Whether it’s a room, a house, a town, or something entirely different (a cave? a spaceship?), provide concrete details to set this place apart — and to create a more immersive reading experience.

Let me know at the comments, if I covered these two points well and did justice to the instructions. Here we go. 

I would like to visit the world, that’s the ambition, but plan B is to have a list of places I would like to see before I die. It sounds like a title for a book, but there is already one like that (ha!). Which places are these? I will mention just one place, which is a hike to the Himalayas. That’s where I am dreaming to head to.

We woke up very early. I love to watch the sun rising. This morning was even more special as I opened the window of our cabin, and saw the beautiful sight of the majestic and imposing mountains. We had traveled through the night to get here, and only now I could see them clearly.

I stood in awe for a few minutes.

I could still hear my thoughts, clouded with a mix of exhilaration for the proximity to the mountains, and with anticipation for the upcoming hike. Will it go according to plan? Have we forgotten anything? Need to check once more the hiking equipment, maps, food, water and an extra shirt and light raincoat. I need to make sure the phone and camera’s batteries are really charged, and to not forget the extra memory cards. The hiking guides have done it countless times though. I am confident we are ready and will follow their guidance.

I paused my thoughts. I could still hear my heart beating fast in elation. I could still feel the air going up and down from my nostrils to my chest. I was breathing from my chest though. There was a still tension. I instinctively took a deep and long breath, and felt a wave of relaxation streaming through my muscles, loosening it slowly. I was becoming aware of the tension which built up in the last days, whilst waving them goodbye. I was replacing it with slow breath cycles, and an emptied mind, until I could not hear anything anymore.

Now I could meet the mountain sight with the presence it deserves. With serenity, with respect, with humility. Just looking at it from here in wonder.

Everything from nature makes me humble. Oceans, forests, plants, soils. Mountains though, put me into perspective with my human existence. Being up there at the mountain top after a hike, is the closer I can get to the skies on my own. And the skies, since I was a kid, is the place where I thought I came from. The place which housed the God my parents told me had created all humans, nature, and planets, and lived somewhere in his own planet inside a beautiful castle at the top of a mountain.

Growing up and losing the innocence and imagination of me-child, I learned that God had no castle, as people gave him many houses and names, and even fought and killed to impose their beliefs to one another. Fear, guilt, punishment, obligations, death, slowly felt like being less of a godly feature than a child would have expected. Organized religion became then the least representation of God.

The existence of life in any form, speaks God language to me. It is enough proof. I need no more words. And up to now, being up in a mountain is the strongest, closer and deepest connection I feel with creation and the ‘creator’.

From there I may or not see the oceans, but I will watch most of life creations. I will see the valleys, the rivers, the forests, the animals, the blue sky and the majestic sun.

I will sit and watch. I will ponder. I will be grateful for being there. I will be grateful for having been sent from that castle in space, straight into the family I belong to, and for the one I have created on my own. I will thank for all the friends I have. I will be grateful for my life.

And as I prepare to descend, I will look once more at that magic sight and sip small mouthfuls of that energy, to renew my license to existence.

I haven’t yet hiked the mountain path to the Himalayas, but I will.

33 thoughts on “If I Could, I Would Be There

    • Thank you so much! I thought you would like to know that I wrote this looking at my photos when hiking in Switzerland, which are still the most beautiful mountains I have ever hiked. Every single word was inspired by what I felt when being there.
      I thank you too, as a Swiss, for having such a beautiful country that I had the honor to live in for a while.
      Best wishes.
      Lucile

  1. Very beautiful and I want to thank you for sharing. I too would like to travel to the Himalayas and trek across feeling all that the creator has to give, to remind me what we so often take for granted…time.

  2. Lucile, this is beautifully written, I felt your longing and your amazement at “being there”. It’s a beautiful piece and I can’t wait to see the photos when you do actually go there!! Xxx

  3. I do hope that you take that hike, how wonderful that would be, and how great to read more from you!

    I have also signed up for Writing 101. Although as yet have not posted a thing, I am working on a response to Day Two during Day Three….

  4. I’m in a state of mild confusion 🙂 There are so many challenges out there and right now I’m falling very short. I came to read a little more about photo rehab and now you have lured me very beautifully to the Himalayas. I think that I’ll be content simply to observe and cheer you on. I love to look at them but the challenge of scaling mountains is not for me. I wish you much joy in your endeavours. 🙂

    • Hi Jo, I joined the writing 101 course offered by WP, hence my post. Everyday we get a new task. This is not a challenge, and this hike is just a personal dream.
      Thanks much for the support and for dropping by and commenting.
      Cheers.
      Lucile

  5. You are plugging away at this course. And doing exceptionally well at it. I have not been posting some of mine, the free-write stuff. I’ll save it for later to make into something else, perhaps. Love your voice in these pieces!

    • Thanks for the lovely comment and encouragement. I have a mind blockage to post about losses. Have done too much of it. I’m ‘sleeping over’ it during the day and will decide later. It’s not an obligation though. I can save for later just as you did.
      I’m getting uncomfortable as I’m getting more personal though. 😳

        • This is not fair to me! Just because I don’t want to know the story of the woman!
          What I meant is that writing about losses touches deep sadness. The loss of my brother has been blogged about enough.
          Divorce? It was a gain and not a loss.
          Losing a job? I would talk about people that may read it here…
          So… Personal has many layers.
          You haven’t trespassed from ego to unconscious ‘id’ as Freud would describe!

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